Merge branch 'msj-devops-score-tips' into 'master'

Update DevOps Score doc and callout

See merge request gitlab-org/gitlab!64786

app/views/admin/dev_ops_report/_callout.html.haml

@@ -8,6 +8,6 @@
       %h4
         = _('Introducing Your DevOps Report')
       %p
-        = _('Your DevOps Report gives an overview of how you are using GitLab from a feature perspective. View how you compare with other organizations, discover features you are not using, and learn best practices through blog posts and white papers.')
+        = _('Your DevOps Report gives an overview of how you are using GitLab from a feature perspective. Use it to view how you compare with other organizations.')
     .svg-container.devops
       = custom_icon('dev_ops_report_overview')

doc/user/admin_area/analytics/dev_ops_report.md

@@ -20,21 +20,22 @@ To see DevOps Report:
 ## DevOps Score
 
 NOTE:
-Your GitLab instance's [Service Ping](../settings/usage_statistics.md#service-ping) must be activated in order to use this feature.
+To see the DevOps score, you must activate your GitLab instance's [Service Ping](../settings/usage_statistics.md#service-ping).
 
-The DevOps Score tab displays the usage of major GitLab features on your instance over
-the last 30 days, averaged over the number of billable users in that time period. It also
-provides a Lead score per feature, which is calculated based on GitLab analysis
-of top-performing instances based on [Service Ping data](../settings/usage_statistics.md#service-ping) that GitLab has
-collected. Your score is compared to the lead score of each feature and then expressed as a percentage at the bottom of said feature.
-Your overall **DevOps Score** is an average of your feature scores. You can use this score to compare your DevOps status to other organizations.
+You can use the DevOps score to compare your DevOps status to other organizations.
 
-The page also provides helpful links to articles and GitLab docs, to help you
-improve your scores.
+The DevOps Score tab displays the usage of major GitLab features on your instance over
+the last 30 days, averaged over the number of billable users in that time period.
+You can also see the Leader usage score, calculated from top-performing instances based on
+[Service Ping data](../settings/usage_statistics.md#service-ping) that GitLab has collected.
+Your score is compared to the lead score of each feature and then expressed
+as a percentage at the bottom of said feature. Your overall **DevOps Score** is an average of your
+feature scores.
 
 Service Ping data is aggregated on GitLab servers for analysis. Your usage
-information is **not sent** to any other GitLab instances. If you have just started using GitLab, it may take a few weeks for data to be
-collected before this feature is available.
+information is **not sent** to any other GitLab instances.
+If you have just started using GitLab, it might take a few weeks for data to be collected before this
+feature is available.
 
 ## DevOps Adoption **(ULTIMATE SELF)**
 
@@ -46,7 +47,7 @@ collected before this feature is available.
 > - The Overview tab [introduced](https://gitlab.com/gitlab-org/gitlab/-/issues/330401) in GitLab 14.1.
 > - DAST and SAST metrics [added](https://gitlab.com/gitlab-org/gitlab/-/issues/328033) in GitLab 14.1.
 
-DevOps Adoption shows you which groups within your organization are using the most essential features of GitLab:
+DevOps Adoption shows you which groups in your organization are using the most essential features of GitLab:
 
 - Dev
   - Approvals
@@ -62,8 +63,7 @@ DevOps Adoption shows you which groups within your organization are using the mo
   - Pipelines
   - Runners
 
-When managing groups in the UI, you can add your groups with the **Add group to table**
-button, in the top right hand section the page.
+To add your groups, in the top right-hand section the page, select **Add group to table**.
 
 DevOps Adoption allows you to:
 

locale/gitlab.pot

@@ -37929,7 +37929,7 @@ msgstr ""
 msgid "Your CSV import for project"
 msgstr ""
 
-msgid "Your DevOps Report gives an overview of how you are using GitLab from a feature perspective. View how you compare with other organizations, discover features you are not using, and learn best practices through blog posts and white papers."
+msgid "Your DevOps Report gives an overview of how you are using GitLab from a feature perspective. Use it to view how you compare with other organizations."
 msgstr ""
 
 msgid "Your GPG keys (%{count})"